my story is about a 14 year old boy named Chris Gardner. Chris is a strong kid with red shaggy hair. he has light blue eyes that look like they have seen a lot. his outfit is the same everyday, a white beater under an unzipped lack and red jacket. he has a chain that he got from his grandmother that is very important to him. he has a pair of baggy sweatpants and red and white air force ones. he always wears a backwards hat. Chris is a great basketball player but his parents will never pay for a real league. he has a lot of trouble at home because his parents always fight and blame each other for Chrise's sisters death at birth. to get away from his rundown home he goes to the courts with his friend Steve Coogins. the Chris goes to college that his parents don't pay for but he has a free scholarship because of basketball. he gets drafted by clippers.
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"What a dunk by Chris Gardner" the announcer says as Gardner jumps over someone and slams one home for two. "he has had an outstanding game to show everybody that he should be the rookie of the year for this 2018 season. the clippers beat the Lakers 109 to 100 all because of Chris Gardner's amazing performance with 12 rebounds and 32 points." after the game Chris has a press conference and all of the reporters laugh when he comes in with a fist pump and says "i cant wait to beat the Celtics in the finals" a reporter asked will your parents be coming to this game because we know you have been having problems with them?" Gardeners excited smile turns to a gloomy frown and says "next question" this gets Chris thinking of what life was like before all of this fame and getting into the NBA.
Liam I suggest that you talk about how chris makes it to the NBA and gets drafted by the clippers
ReplyDeleteThanks for posting, Liam! So it looks like your story will ultimately have a happy ending. I'm looking forward to seeing what will happen so that Chris gets to the Clippers.
ReplyDeletehi liam
ReplyDeleteYour story sounds really good! and you should put more detail in your realy story about how the parents fight about the sisters death.
Laim I think that this is a really good story. If i would say one thing it would be describe more of his scolarship and him getting drafeted by the Clippers.
ReplyDeletehey liam i think you should talk more about why he didnt answer that question. you did a good job with your first paragraph, did the reporter mean to bring up a sensative subject?
ReplyDeletehey liam i think you should talk more about why he didnt answer that question. you did a good job with your first paragraph, did the reporter mean to bring up a sensative subject? I think you should talk more about if the guy regrets becoming such a good athlete and all the fame that comes with it.
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